jvers 2,394 Posted July 25, 2014 Share Posted July 25, 2014 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PornStar 237 Posted July 25, 2014 Share Posted July 25, 2014 wow some people have a lot of free time i don't even have time to read . anyway welcome to the forum and feel free to do whatever you want but read the rules first. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Good People 2,455 Posted July 25, 2014 Share Posted July 25, 2014 Who are the people in your story even? Anyway I'm not into your writing style...too shallow, basic vocabulary, no attention paid to descriptions, it feels rushed. Gives me the impression that you just want to get to the part with the cheesy relationship, instead of focusing on character development. I'm not trying to bash, I'm just pointing out that you could write way better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sooyoung's Wife 3,713 Posted July 25, 2014 Share Posted July 25, 2014 Hmm.. I scanned the first two chapters. To honest with you I have to agree with the above poster. The vocabulary is basic and there are too little descriptions. Also, bots of random korean like "Anyeongie" is an eye sore and puts the fic out of place, I wouldn't recommend you do that unless you use titles, like hyung or dongsaeng. Also, you don't need so much spacing in between paragraphs and dialogue. Like: Paragraph Paragraph Paragraph Dialogue. You don't need to do that. I'd definitely advise you to work one more descriptions, even if you have to squeeze it out of you. Also, make sure you proof read the entire thing before publishing. I see a lot of spelling errors. And sometimes when proof reading you also catch awkward sentence structures and things you could change. If you need anyone to help you with writing or anything please feel free to come to me. I'm very experienced and I'd love to give some advice. And don't be ashamed of your fic (bc I see you edited it out of your post), we're just tryna help you improve~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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