chanyeolears 2,221 Posted September 14, 2020 Share Posted September 14, 2020 And little did he know, he'd find someone better that was capable of making him fall head over heels for her. ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spopo 2,003 Posted September 14, 2020 Share Posted September 14, 2020 (edited) I don't know that it's grammatically incorrect (although "someone who was" sounds a little better, even if "someone that was" isn't strictly incorrect), but it isn't a good sentence. It's way too wordy. I'd go with either "And little did he know, he'd find someone better." or "And little did he know, he'd find someone who was capable of making him fall head over heels." The "for her" bit is unnecessary and a little awkward, because it's implied. And the "someone" has too many epithets as presented. If you really want both, you could say "And little did he know, he'd find someone better: someone who was capable of making him fall head over heels." That way, the last bit of the sentence doesn't get caught up in a mess of pronouns. Edited September 14, 2020 by spopo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lighterxx 12,204 Posted September 14, 2020 Share Posted September 14, 2020 I will say yes but like spool said, its better if its fixed a bit, just instead of using :, use ; it creates a more correct sentence formation Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rosiecon 246 Posted September 15, 2020 Share Posted September 15, 2020 So, you can't start a sentence with "And". This is how i'd put it. Little did he know he'd find someone better, someone that was capable of making him fall head over heels. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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