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Can I ask if my writing is good here? My teacher gave an assignment to just introduce ourselves in Mandarin with like our vocab words and stuff

I wanted to make sure it sounds ok before I submit it

It’s in the spoiler

 

我的生活

大家好,我å«ç™½å¾‹è¯—,我是美国人。我å五å²äº†ã€‚我家有六å£äººã€‚

我爸爸,我妈妈,我妹妹,我奶奶,我爷爷,还有我。我的爸爸是美国人,我的妈妈是å¤å·´äººã€‚我家ä½åœ¨è¿ˆé˜¿å¯†ã€‚我喜欢学习中文,我学习中文åŠå¹´äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘çš„è€å¸ˆæ˜¯å¼ éœžè€å¸ˆï¼Œå¥¹æ˜¯å±±ä¸œäººã€‚ 我的爱好有很多。比如说:画画,游泳,å¬éŸ³ä¹ å’Œ 大太æžã€‚æˆ‘å¾ˆå–œæ¬¢åƒ å·§å…‹åŠ›ï¼Œæ±‰å ¡åŒ… å’Œ 牛肉,哦喜欢看电影。我常常和朋å‹ä¸€èµ·åŽ»å–咖啡。我有一个 好朋å‹å¥¹å«Amber她喜欢画画 她很好。她最喜欢的颜色是红色,她最喜欢的动物是狗。圣诞节è¦åˆ°äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘希望和家人一起去西ç­ç‰™ï¼æˆ‘喜欢圣诞节,因为我å¯ä»¥æ”¶åˆ°å¾ˆå¤šç¤¼ç‰©ï¼ç¥å¤§å®¶åœ£è¯žå¿«ä¹ï¼

学生:白律诗

2019年12月日

 

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Overall is good!

 

The Taiji part you used the wrong word. You used big instead of the fighting (da).

 

I like it watching movie part you used the wrong I (wo).

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Can I ask if my writing is good here? My teacher gave an assignment to just introduce ourselves in Mandarin with like our vocab words and stuff

I wanted to make sure it sounds ok before I submit it

It’s in the spoiler

 

我的生活

大家好,我å«ç™½å¾‹è¯—,我是美国人。我å五å²äº†ã€‚我家有六å£äººã€‚

我爸爸,我妈妈,我妹妹,我奶奶,我爷爷,还有我。我的爸爸是美国人,我的妈妈是å¤å·´äººã€‚我家ä½åœ¨è¿ˆé˜¿å¯†ã€‚我喜欢学习中文,我学习中文åŠå¹´äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘çš„è€å¸ˆæ˜¯å¼ éœžè€å¸ˆï¼Œå¥¹æ˜¯å±±ä¸œäººã€‚ 我的爱好有很多。比如说:画画,游泳,å¬éŸ³ä¹ å’Œ 大太æžã€‚æˆ‘å¾ˆå–œæ¬¢åƒ å·§å…‹åŠ›ï¼Œæ±‰å ¡åŒ… å’Œ 牛肉,哦喜欢看电影。我常常和朋å‹ä¸€èµ·åŽ»å–咖啡。我有一个 好朋å‹å¥¹å«Amber她喜欢画画 她很好。她最喜欢的颜色是红色,她最喜欢的动物是狗。圣诞节è¦åˆ°äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘希望和家人一起去西ç­ç‰™ï¼æˆ‘喜欢圣诞节,因为我å¯ä»¥æ”¶åˆ°å¾ˆå¤šç¤¼ç‰©ï¼ç¥å¤§å®¶åœ£è¯žå¿«ä¹ï¼

学生:白律诗

2019年12月日

 

 

This would be better

大家好,我å«ç™½å¾‹è¯—,我是美国人。我现在å五å²ã€‚我家有六个家庭承æˆå‘˜åŒ…括,爷爷,奶奶, 爸爸,妈妈,妹妹 å’Œ 我。我的爸爸是美国人而我的妈妈是从å¤å·´ã€‚我家ä½åœ¨è¿ˆé˜¿å¯†ã€‚我喜欢学习中文,我学了åŠå¹´ã€‚我的è€å¸ˆæ˜¯å¼ éœžè€å¸ˆï¼Œå¥¹ä»Žå±±ä¸œã€‚ 我的爱好是:画画,游泳,å¬éŸ³ä¹ å’Œ ç­‰ç­‰ã€‚æˆ‘å¾ˆå–œæ¬¢åƒ å·§å…‹åŠ›ï¼Œæ±‰å ¡åŒ… å’Œ 牛肉。我也喜欢看电影。我常常和朋å‹ä¸€èµ·åŽ»å–咖啡。我有一个 好朋å‹å¥¹å«Amber她喜欢画画 她很得好。她最喜欢的颜色是红色而喜欢的动物是狗。圣诞节è¦åˆ°äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘希望和家人å¯ä»¥ä¸€èµ·åŽ»è¥¿ç­ç‰™ï¼æˆ‘喜欢圣诞节,因为我å¯ä»¥æ”¶åˆ°å¾ˆå¤šç¤¼ç‰©ï¼ç¥å¤§å®¶åœ£è¯žå¿«ä¹ï¼

学生:白律诗

2019年12月日

 

 

 

I hope it's ok for you. Good luck ohbi.png

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it's really good overall!! hehe. you could also consider kstarnet's reply, as it does make things a lot smoother :)

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Pretty good!  

 

Other than what kaibibi mentioned (the 2 typos), the '她很好' part about your friend Amber is a little bit weird. I'm not sure whether you mean that she's a nice person (,她人很好), or she draws well (畫得很好). The punctuation is also a little bit off (too many full stops), and not that you really have to fix it but fyi the space before and after 和 is actually unnecessary (but I could understand that it's easier for you to read~)

 

Kstarnet's reply is indeed better but I'm not sure whether your teacher taught you that much or expected you to write that well laugh.png

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Overall is good!

The Taiji part you used the wrong word. You used big instead of the fighting (da).

I like it watching movie part you used the wrong I (wo).

It’s æ‰“å¤ªæž and 我喜欢看电影?

Pretty good!

 

Other than what kaibibi mentioned (the 2 typos), the '她很好' part about your friend Amber is a little bit weird. I'm not sure whether you mean that she's a nice person (,她人很好), or she draws well (畫得很好). The punctuation is also a little bit off (too many full stops), and not that you really have to fix it but fyi the space before and after 和 is actually unnecessary (but I could understand that it's easier for you to read~)

 

Kstarnet's reply is indeed better but I'm not sure whether your teacher taught you that much or expected you to write that well :lol:

Oh I meant she’s good at drawing there thank you

 

This would be better

大家好,我å«ç™½å¾‹è¯—,我是美国人。我现在å五å²ã€‚我家有六个家庭承æˆå‘˜åŒ…括,爷爷,奶奶, 爸爸,妈妈,妹妹 å’Œ 我。我的爸爸是美国人而我的妈妈是从å¤å·´ã€‚我家ä½åœ¨è¿ˆé˜¿å¯†ã€‚我喜欢学习中文,我学了åŠå¹´ã€‚我的è€å¸ˆæ˜¯å¼ éœžè€å¸ˆï¼Œå¥¹ä»Žå±±ä¸œã€‚ 我的爱好是:画画,游泳,å¬éŸ³ä¹ å’Œ ç­‰ç­‰ã€‚æˆ‘å¾ˆå–œæ¬¢åƒ å·§å…‹åŠ›ï¼Œæ±‰å ¡åŒ… å’Œ 牛肉。我也喜欢看电影。我常常和朋å‹ä¸€èµ·åŽ»å–咖啡。我有一个 好朋å‹å¥¹å«Amber她喜欢画画 她很得好。她最喜欢的颜色是红色而喜欢的动物是狗。圣诞节è¦åˆ°äº†ï¼Œæˆ‘希望和家人å¯ä»¥ä¸€èµ·åŽ»è¥¿ç­ç‰™ï¼æˆ‘喜欢圣诞节,因为我å¯ä»¥æ”¶åˆ°å¾ˆå¤šç¤¼ç‰©ï¼ç¥å¤§å®¶åœ£è¯žå¿«ä¹ï¼

学生:白律诗

2019年12月日

 

 

 

I hope it's ok for you. Good luck :ohbi:

Thank you! (But I think my teacher would be sus if I used this haha she helped me a bit so she knows that I wouldn’t write that well yet)

 

 

Did I use the right ta?

她 is she

ä»– is he ?

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