Arthur Morgan 3,556 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 I have an assignment for my french class and our teacher basically asked us to write a poem in french, could someone who speaks french kindly go over it to see if what i wrote makes sense? Thx ! Here's my poem Le flow est illimité rien ne sert d'imiter Sont tous intimidés sont pas en sécurité T'es pas d'la famille, pas d'négociations On veut pas écouter tes explications On arrive chez toi sans invitation On t'allume ta mère sans hésitation Un écrasement d'te-tê et j'te couperai ta respiration Mon Sauvagerie leur a donné un peu d'inspiration Tu nous cher-cher ? Tu connais l'adresse J't'efface comme Yannick Bolasie, comme Riyad Mahrez Connu d'tout-par comme la Tour Eiffel J'suis toujours en tête comme un couvre-chef 9-3, 2-7, 10 12 14, les chiffres du loto Quatre vingt ze-trei la puissance, tu connais J'suis une grosse cagoule, t'es un gros bonnet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nelkoya 17,769 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 On t'allume ta mère sans hésitation Un écrasement d'te-tê et j'te couperai ta respiration Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonicPotato 2,197 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 lmaoo beautiful text Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Afanofabae 1,833 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 is this really for you french class cos this is really violent or did you copy it from a french rap that you radomly find Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KaepJang 2,830 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Sofiane - Jesuispasséchezso Episode 6/93 Empire Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galaxy. 3,572 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 It's so inspiring that someone already turned it into a song! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yagura 12,799 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 On t'allume ta mère sans hésitation lol. what did you mean to write? Un écrasement de tête Ma (not "mon") sauvagerie Tu nous cherches? edit: lmao if thats a song then its tragiccccccccc Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
car door guy 11,500 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 "On t'allume ta mère sans hésitation" Lmao... "d'te-tê" You're using verlan? "Mon Ma Sauvagerie leur a donné un peu d'inspiration" "Tu nous cher-cher ?" Verlan again? Even then, it's Ches-Cher Overall it's pretty good lmaooo. I liked it. Very rap wow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CALICO CAT 8,999 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 is this homage? maybe submiting trap song lyrics for your assignment isnt the best idea Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CipCip 19 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 This 'poem' is weird. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Afanofabae 1,833 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Sofiane - Jesuispasséchezso Episode 6/93 Empire It's so inspiring that someone already turned it into a song! omg tragic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HugeBoi Minos Wife 40,568 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Sis I read it and this sounds more like a rap than a poem You didn't make too many mistakes apart from "mon sauvagerie" (the pronoun is "ma") "Tu nous cher-cher", wouldn't that be "tu nous cherches?" "Connu d'tout part" would be "Connu de toutes parts" Btw I'm not French but I do speak the language fluently. Hope it helped! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gummybear_dragon 1,695 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 On t'allume ta mère sans hésitation lol. what did you mean to write? Un écrasement de tête Ma (not "mon") sauvagerie Tu nous cherche? edit: lmao if thats a song then its tragiccccccccc Since you're french can you help me with this sentence, too? "Pendant j’ai mis mon pull over préférée, il y avait un texto que mon ami m’a envoyé et ce dit que ce n'était pas un jour de commencement tariff." I was trying to say, "While I put on my favourite sweater, there was a text that my friend sent me and it said it isn't a late start day." So I had to use les verbes pronominaux and le passee composee. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KaepJang 2,830 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 omg tragic Lmao how did you find that ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HugeBoi Minos Wife 40,568 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 It's so inspiring that someone already turned it into a song! Lord lmao Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Primazaza 730 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Pas étonnant que j'ai rien compris, c'est du rap "français" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
H e r e 616 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Mais quel talent Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Balancetonquoi 4,707 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Beurkk Je deteste le rap francais Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Afanofabae 1,833 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Since you're french can you help me with this sentence, too? "Pendant j’ai mis mon pull over préférée, il y avait un texto que mon ami m’a envoyé et ce dit que ce n'était pas un jour de commencement tariff." I was trying to say, "While I put on my favourite sweater, there was a text that my friend sent me and it said it isn't a late start day." So I had to use les verbes pronominaux and le passee composee. it's like that "pendant que m'était mon pull over préféré j'ai reçus un texto/message de mon ami et ils disait que c'était un debut de journée tardif" i didn't quit understand what you were trying to said tough so it might not be right and also the correction of your sentence is in "paste" but i don't know if you were trying to said it in the "present" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
car door guy 11,500 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Sis I read it and this sounds more like a rap than a poem You didn't make too many mistakes apart from "mon sauvagerie" (the pronoun is "ma") "Tu nous cher-cher", wouldn't that be "tu nous cherches?" "Connu d'tout part" would be "Connu de toutes parts" Btw I'm not French but I do speak the language fluently. Hope it helped! It's actually correct, OP is using verlan loll very french rap style. It's cherches et partout. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HaTe.Me 40 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 wtf Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Afanofabae 1,833 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Lmao how did you find that ? he is actually quite popular in france but it's just tragic i have that song Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kawther 1,266 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Tragiqueeeee lmao Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yagura 12,799 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Since you're french can you help me with this sentence, too? "Pendant j’ai mis mon pull over préférée, il y avait un texto que mon ami m’a envoyé et ce dit que ce n'était pas un jour de commencement tariff." I was trying to say, "While I put on my favourite sweater, there was a text that my friend sent me and it said it isn't a late start day." So I had to use les verbes pronominaux and le passee composee. You could say something like : " Pendant que je mettais mon pull préféré, j'ai reçu un message que mon ami m'a envoyé et il disait que ce n'est pas un début de journée tardif" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HugeBoi Minos Wife 40,568 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 It's actually correct, OP is using verlan loll very french rap style. It's cherches et partout. yeah I figured. If that's verlan ofc it would work in a song but since OP wants to give it to their teacher idk lol I think if I were the teacher I might get pissed cuz that's too far from a poem tbh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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