PinkPunk 1,129 Posted February 17, 2015 Share Posted February 17, 2015 I feel like Lil Cham rn but yeah here. My verse is just a demo. I'm the 1st rapper and the 2nd rapper is my friend. Literally all my friends are good and then there is me. https://soundcloud.com/pinkpunk-3/truffle-butter-remix-demo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
1stminialbum 150 Posted February 17, 2015 Share Posted February 17, 2015 hmm i bopped a bit! you did a good job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PinkPunk 1,129 Posted February 17, 2015 Author Share Posted February 17, 2015 hmm i bopped a bit! you did a good job glad you enjoyed it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ChYkN 743 Posted February 17, 2015 Share Posted February 17, 2015 Wow, I thought it would really suck tbh lol but it's not that bad at all. I do have a few comments on things I've noticed um at 0:32, I didn't like that you said me again when you just said it at 0:25, at 0:40 it could have been smoother, and uh at 1:01 when you said "I'm not one to fuck with", I felt like it could have been delivered better. OH! And the "ok, ok" thing was said again at 0:53 I didn't like that, idk I just don't like repetitive things basically. I didn't mind it the first time though. Honestly it was really nice though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PinkPunk 1,129 Posted February 17, 2015 Author Share Posted February 17, 2015 Wow, I thought it would really suck tbh lol but it's not that bad at all. I do have a few comments on things I've noticed um at 0:32, I didn't like that you said me again when you just said it at 0:25, at 0:40 it could have been smoother, and uh at 1:01 when you said "I'm not one to fuck with", I felt like it could have been delivered better. OH! And the "ok, ok" thing was said again at 0:53 I didn't like that, idk I just don't like repetitive things basically. I didn't mind it the first time though. Honestly it was really nice though. Wow thanks for the feedback! I really am glad you like went so into depth. I don't really write raps often (aside from comedy raps I used to do), I mainly just do covers of them but thanks oh my gosh! I do agree about 0:25 - 0:40 I completely fumbled over my words at one spot in there. I really love good constructive feedback like this. Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Park Hyoshin's vocal coach 4,019 Posted February 17, 2015 Share Posted February 17, 2015 OOH HUNTY YOU BETTER FUCKIN WORK!!!! YASSSS YOU Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PinkPunk 1,129 Posted February 17, 2015 Author Share Posted February 17, 2015 OOH HUNTY YOU BETTER FUCKIN WORK!!!! YASSSS YOU THANKS! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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