churndownforwhat 546 Posted December 3, 2014 Share Posted December 3, 2014 I wrote a one shot and had my sister read it and she cried...endlessly. Want to read it? Taehyung x OC Here you go~ *click on picture* tell me what you think since I'm entering it in a writing contest Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DivaBoo 1,480 Posted December 3, 2014 Share Posted December 3, 2014 Just a quick recommendation from a fellow writer...stick with solid black for font colors. And if you want to go outside that, avoid pastels on white. It's terribly hard to read. Your grammar is fine, but the phrasing is a tad bit awkward. If I had to be honest, it's sad, but not terribly sad...not enough development to give me those "feelings." Overall, it's very sweet and nice for an one shot. Good luck with the competition though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
churndownforwhat 546 Posted December 3, 2014 Author Share Posted December 3, 2014 Just a quick recommendation from a fellow writer...stick with solid black for font colors. And if you want to go outside that, avoid pastels on white. It's terribly hard to read. Your grammar is fine, but the phrasing is a tad bit awkward. If I had to be honest, it's sad, but not terribly sad...not enough development to give me those "feelings." Overall, it's very sweet and nice for an one shot. Good luck with the competition though. thanks for the advice! I was kind of taking a risk with the colors, hoping it would be similar colors to balloons..but i guess it didn't work. Should I change it to black or darken the colors? what do you think Which parts being specific? (so i can fix it) I wasn't wanting it too sad but more like a good feeling sad, you know? But if i were to change anything to give more 'feeling' what do you suggest I should add? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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